trust is tough, no one wants
to give it and nothing is harder to earn.
binding her hands to the posts on the bed
nothing can weigh heavier over
a relationship than trust.
from parent to child,
friends and lovers,
brother and sister.
the blindfold pulled against her eyes tight.
she could hear the door open and voices whisper.
the higher the degree
of trust
it will build up
the magic
of the relationship,
taking it to levels
never imagined
and emotions that are explosive.
she could feel their breath between her legs.
ready to experience her own personal explosion.
imagine what God must have felt
trusting that man would do what they did to his son.
imagine that knowledge and control.
power.
power like the flood she was feeling now.
muscles twitching and aching spasms.
filling the room with screams.
"Jesus...fuck...shit"
until her control returns.
with eyes watering she orders them both out.
"for the love of God"
trust can be reached on levels both known
and unknown,
and desires that are shown
and torn to the surface.
she lays naked on the bed
wondering what the hell she got herself into.
as I ask her
if she's ready for me.
2.13.02
This is fantastic. My heart beating faster with each stanza. I love the alternation, as though the writer is telling the woman what she's in for. Trust is an intense thing, for sure. Well done. ~em
ReplyDeleteoh man....this was intense and love in the end that in spite of all the thoughts it was you...whew...nice...
ReplyDeleteA very interesting post you have here..i like reading posts like this with a twist on relationship.
ReplyDeleteGlad to see you linked up ...nice to meet you~
Dude! I should have heeded the warning! (blush) I'm a terribly trusting soul by times but I'll certainly think twice before I'm blindfolded. This was a terribly dark write for me, as I imagine having that type of trust violated and the shame...my goodness, the shame! Okay, impact...powerfully delivered!
ReplyDeleteYes it was a powerful write, sensational in fact. You took us up to the event realistically but in the end you blinked. This was what it was, but I'm too much in the dark to know whether it was prose or poetry. Thanks for posting, though. I thought it was interesting.
ReplyDeleteTom Eliot:
ReplyDeleteThis is a very interesting piece of writing.
I was pulled in to a place i like to inhabit but find rarely outside my own mind.
You create an imagined space that has meat and subversive power with great lines.
You linger on the edge while exploring the possibilities.
Looking forward to reading more of your work.
Such a powerful poem - wow
ReplyDeleteThis is a brilliant poem. Loved the imagery and honesty and erotic frankness. So many powerful lines about the different dimensions of trust that define our lives and relationships.
ReplyDeleteThese lines stick with me:
"nothing can weigh heavier over
a relationship than trust.
from parent to child,
friends and lovers,
brother and sister."
Amazing piece my friend.
Thanks for sharing.
George Pappas
author of novel "Monogamy Sucks"
your words flow so freely, easily into the next. i felt as if i escaped my surroundings and stepped into that room, into her mind, experienced the moment. a true talent. you empower.
ReplyDeleteThis was good and a little too close to the bone, as it were. The fact that it made me uncomfortable rather than titillated is proof of its artistry.
ReplyDeleteGreat job, mosk
"the higher the degree
ReplyDeleteof trust
it will build up
the magic
of the relationship,
taking it to levels
never imagined
and emotions that are explosive."
This was very stirring...